T1+Writing

__Tuesday 5th April__

**WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty**

Where have you been this year? If you have been nowhere then it is time you came to the Bay Of Plenty. I think that the Bay Of Plenty is one of the best places in the world! The Bay Of Plenty has virtually no big traffic jams. It also has some of the best beaches for swimming in New Zealand. Have you seen many things in the paper about break ins in the Bay Of Plenty? No you can’t have because the Bay Of Plenty has plenty of things but thieves are not one of them.

Have you ever been stuck in a really big traffic jam? Well I have and I hate them it is so annoying being stuck in one of the monsters in Auckland. If like people say and the traffic jams in Auckland are nothing like the one in other parts of the world then I would not like to be in one of them this is why I would come to the Bay Of Plenty for the holidays. The people in the Bay Of Plenty have a reputation of being the most amazing drivers. The only place in the Bay Of Plenty where traffic gets a little like Auckland is Welcome Bay road roundabout and that is only during the rush hour!

The Bay Of Plenty has great swimming beaches and some absolutely fabulous surfing beaches. The lifeguards are great and won’t let you drown. The people on the beach will call the lifeguards even if you are swimming outside the flags. The swells are normally quite small, and there aren’t many big rips. The worst place for swimming in New Zealand is in the napier area, the Bay Of Plenty is nothing like that. If you want a great beach for both surfing and swimming I suggest Mount Maunganui main beach also Mount Main of short. The swells get big enough for surfing outside of the flagged area and get small enough for swimming in the flagged area so all in all it is a great beach.

Have you ever been scared that you will be broken into at night? If you have then you should come to the Bay Of Plenty because we get hardly any brake ins here. The amount of burglars is increasing and the beautiful Bay Of Plenty is becoming a better place to live. I think that the safest place in the Bay Of Plenty is Tauranga in the Western Bay Of Plenty region.

See why you should chose the Bay Of Plenty for a holiday or even to live. I think that the Bay Of Plenty is the best place in the world. Where is your success criteria Reuben? This should have been copied from the class wiki! Fantastic introduction that states your 3 ideas and includes rhetorical questions, well done. Your paragraphs have been used correctly and include lots of detail. Well done for comparing BOP to other places also. You have made excellent progress with your writing and are beginning to use strong imperatives to really convince. You need to make sure your conclusion restates your 3 ideas and reinforces your arguments. Overall a very good effort, well done. Miss Crone :)